Persian Westender

MPD jan

 My friend, I couldn’t have translated this myself, so eloquent and so loyal. Much appreciation for taking time and doing this magnificent job.

(I only would change 'You are' in fifth line to 'He is a ... ' as "setabr shaanehei" refers to " yeki marde setabr shaaneh". I also would omit 'departed' in eleventh line, as the word 'released' is already brought up...) 

Bless all of you 

Mehrban jan

Thank you so much for your heartening feedback.

The original proverb which is reference of my poem, was to show the absurdity of the justice system of its time. I only tried to illustrate the situation of the forgotten victim of that scenario, perhaps one out of so many...

Cheers  

Shooshtari Coppersmith

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Oh, hey rhythm of big hammer,
on the copper pot!
Are you that loud,
to yet reach heaven’s ear?

You are shoulder’s Robustness, big man, much proud
Resigned, crawled into a damp-prison’s corner,
Slowly, slowly slipping into his own’s self...

Coppersmith,
believes in his innocence,
Ergo soon he’ll be released...
His tired spirit departed from trapping of his figure...
In a day that perhaps a pigeon,
spends some time on top of his high-arched shop
circling like a pilgrim.

Zounds!
The righteous have held his children hostage,
making him confess to his castration

persian westender

Thanks for giving us insight to the predicament of that wronged coppersmith.  This is a beautiful work in concept and execution.

Divaneh Jan

شما همیشه شرمنده می‌کنین. مرسی‌ 

Very Beautiful

Loved your beautiful poem.